I was really impressed by the comment my "younger" person left me, it was very precise and the constructive criticism given was the same as my mentors. So for post 27 I reread over my work multiple times to check for grammatical errors.
Sarah's comment:
While reading your story I felt as if I was right there with you in the nursing home, you even explained the nurses in such great detail I had visuals. Your best line was "We walked passed another room where yet more people in wheelchairs were dressed up and wearing hats saying ‘Happy New Year." I pictured a scene from a movie and it expressed a sense of comfort. Although people were in wheel chairs they still had holiday spirit and were festive.
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Sarah's comment to me:
Steph - I really enjoyed reading this blog post. It showed equally your perspective and the woman in the story. It seems as though through her experience you have been able to open up to your own ideas on life. The line that stood out to me was, "As I was leaving her house she stated that she never wants to go back to a hospital and if she's going to die she wants to die in the comfort of her own home... Hearing her say this wasn't too surprising because if I was in her situation I would want to do the same." This seems like a common trend we are noticing throughout this unit. People would rather be surrounded by the ones they love the most verses the strangers who are paid to keep them alive. I think you have a good start to this story and I would like to hear more!
Megumi's comment:
While reading your post two sentences really popped out to me. The first being "Right now, I see her as a strong independent figure that continues to teach me the importance of living." I was impressed by this sentence because it is very strong and powerful and I personally would feel great hearing this from a loved one it would give me the courage to keep fighting. The second sentence that popped out to me was "I was shocked but I knew I had to stay strong so I could reassure her that everything will be okay" This popped out to me because although your sad you know you have to stay strong for your loved one because the struggle is a lot harder for her. Your post was very inspirational and drew me in great job.
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Megumi's comment to me:
I found your post very moving and explicitly showed your reactions and emotions toward this figure. A line I found very insightful was, "It is possible that she doesn't want to feel like she is relying on medicine to keep her alive and she wants to die "naturally" and if it's her time to go she wants to just go." I also found it ironic that this figure was the complete oppostite as my grandmother who relies on medicine because she's afraid of death. The post made me question how we should use medicine.
Mentors comment:Steph- I really enjoyed this post because you stated your opinions on the situation and also the opinion of what the family member might believe. You didn't necessarily agree with what she believes, but that is what makes this post so interesting. It also shows how passionate you are about the subject. My favorite quote in this post was, "She is always falling and getting cuts and bruises but we all think of her as a warrior." In your familys case, her illness is not making her a weak person, but more of a fighter or "warrior". I find this very interesting because society would label her as the weaker link, but instead, you take a different approach. Beautiful! *Submitted by mentor
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