Looking over my comments I noticed many of my commenters said I have to reread over my work and check for grammar mistakes, so i have to continue to take my time and reread at least twice to make sure I catch all of my mistakes.
Jay
I really liked how you talked about technology and hooked it to specific aspects of illness and dying and backed up your ideas. Your post was very engaging and I actually learned something from it. "Technology has helped to increase life expectancy and has helped decrease the threat of death in cancer, heart disease, and stroke patients." I found this sentence to be very powerful, I don't connect things like technology to other aspects of life, and hearing this made me realize technology can have a good affect on us as well.
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Megumi
Your first paragraph pulled me right in, I agree that if an illness doesn't affect someone first hand they tend not to pay to much attention to it. "The seriousness of depression and the statistics for it matters because it shows in the numbers. If depression is treated more often, suicide rates will decrease greatly." I found this statement to be very powerful because if people/ doctors help themselves/patients more often then the outcome would be tremendous and benefit a lot of people. Thank you for giving such great detail with you r research and ideas.
----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Steph- I enjoyed reading your post, and found it very descriptive. It helped me get a better understanding of what a nursing home is like. I found it ironic that people think its for the best to send ill patients to a nursing home without really putting ourselves in their shoes. I honestly don't even think the nurses care about their patients-they just do their 'job.' A line I liked specifically was, "This experience helped me realize I rather just take care of my parents when they need help instead of sending them to a nursing home, because I feel like its hard for the nurses and doctors to keep track of all the patients." I completely agree with you, and I personally don't like the idea of nursing homes-it makes me question if its really 'homelike. Sarah First sentence was amazing, "As much as we have a choice on the person we want or would like to be our bodies have a mind of their own." This is compeltly true and many of us haven't accepted that yet. The 8 things you listed to prevent Altimezer's are there statistics that prove those 8 things will actually help? I really enjoyed reading your post and it really opened my mind. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Steph - Your post and your experience in the nursing home reminded me a lot of when I went to a nursing home. The description in your opening paragraph immediatly embraces the reader. The line that stood out to me the most was, "In our culture it is very common for families to send there ill family members to a nursing home because it is an easy way out and they don't have to take responsibility for another human being." I agree with you, at a certain point people loose patience and the ability to stay sane, they resort to the "professionals" and loose the constant contact. It would be interesting for you to visit another nursing home and see if they are similar or different. Overall I thought this was very thoughtful and liked the way you described it while presenting to the class! |
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